Entry #6





Genre: YA Fantasy

Title: Custodian

Word Count: 80,000

Hogwarts House:
 Emme would be Slytherin, but with more than a little Ravenclaw. She's a self-serving, resourceful street-rat. She does learn to care about things outside herself, but it's hard to override a life spent looking out for number one.
Sean, on the other hand, is Gryffindor all the way - staunchly protecting others according to what he believes is right.

Pitch: Indebted street rat Emme must save alchemy’s greatest creation – a living homunculus – or die for her crimes. But for soldier Sean, letting her succeed could see the world fall to the devastation of alchemical improvidence.

First 250:
She didn’t see the soldier until she’d slammed into him. Emme jolted backward, looked up to see the red and black uniform of the Enlightenment, and froze. 
“Watch it!” The soldier sneered as his eyes roamed over her dirt-covered clothing. Emme forced herself to take a step forward. Guilty people didn’t cosy up to soldiers, and there was no way the soldier could know what she was hiding. She smiled at him as he recoiled slightly, though the revulsion that flickered in his eyes stung.

She'd like to see what he looked like after spending day after day crawling through the wreckage his army had wreaked upon her city. Too late, it occurred to her that the smell of ash clung to her clothes as surely as the dirt did, telling the story of where she’d been. The soldier’s mouth tugged down at the edges. Gods, if he was starting to get suspicious–

She thrust her body forward. The soldier's eyes dilated and his expression turned slack. Good. Street rat she may be, but she was still a girl in all the ways that counted. In this moment, the soldier no longer seemed to care she was covered in dirt.

Nor did he flinch as she lifted his coin purse right out of his pocket.

Emme danced away, blowing a kiss as she went. She was gone before the soldier could remember he'd been suspicious of her, melting into the crowd.


Other Team Hufflepuff Entries:



MG: FORT SMYTHE AND THE RUBY HEART


ADULT: THE ORCHID GIRL'S CHASE


YA: BRAIN DAMAGE


YA: HER GOLDEN CRIMES


YA: THE DROWNING OF MOLLY WHITFORD


YA: THE G.A.P. PROJECT


YA: THE DEVIL DON'T LOVE YOU


YA: ECHO CHAMBER HEIST





Request System:


10 Points – Query and first 10 pages = Petrificus Totalus
25 Points – Query and first 25 pages = Protego
50 Points – Query and first 50 pages = Stupefy
100 Points – Query and first 100 pages = Sectumsempra
200 Points – Query and full = Expelliarmus

1 comment:

  1. I love a good story about alchemy. 25 points to Hufflepuff!

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